As a student of the College in the Schools program, the class WRIT 1301 has provided me the opportunity to improve my writing and prepare me more effectively for college. During this semester course I worked with peers to improve not only my own writing, but also improved my analysis of peer works of similar structure.
My first paper, a narrative titled Confessions of A Living Sin, was arguably the easiest piece to create, while simultaneously being the most difficult to write. Narrative pieces push writers to write of moments that are strong in emotion, and often times leave the writer vulnerable to whom is reading their work. For me, my vulnerability was discussing the ostracism I faced as a queer and transgender person in a conservative catholic church. Because this piece focuses on an anger-fear fueled moment, I am able to use more expressive writing such as “The unbearable desire to peel off my skin, peel off the feelings that weren’t ‘normal’,” seen on the third page of Confessions of A Living Sin. While I was able to rewrite sections of the narrative or take out parts from the first to the final draft, that did not make it easier for me personally to express my feelings on paper for a professor to read. Following the narrative, was the critical review of Korean Barbeque Pizza, from a restaurant in South Minneapolis known as Pizzeria Lola. Writing my critical review proved to be fairly difficult for me, because it was not a paper focused solely on analysis nor emotion and experience. Since this piece was a combination of an analytical piece and a narrative piece, I struggled in finding the lines between expressive writing and more grammatically precise writing. Once I was able to ground myself with the criteria I had found, I was able to write more thorough ideas. On page 3, I examine the cultural differences between Italian-American cuisine and Korean cuisine, comparing the cuisine of Italian-American which …show more content…
Over the many hours we spent writing this paper together, we faced times of tension between each other, as well as our regards to the fire department. The differences between our first and last drafts of this paper are astounding, as we entirely changed our thesis half-way through the process in order to be more empathetic. Our original thesis read as “Encouraged by the department’s occupational hierarchy, the Apple Valley firefighters have come to use toxic masculinity as an outlet to mask personal insecurity” which we began to realize was presumptuous on our end as well as something of an attack on the vulnerability that had been exposed to us as observers of this group. Our final thesis, after many revisions and discussion, was “Emulating an image of strength the AVFD encourages and assertive environment, which ultimately cultivates its members’ stronger self-image”. Our growth through this paper was one which we cultivated through each other and the peer reviews we participated in.
My final paper for WRIT 1301 was a trend paper, in which I examined the rise of acceptance of queer people due to millennial lead efforts. Unlike the previous three papers, this paper was mostly analytical and factual, with little room for my preferred style of writing. My biggest struggle in this paper was the collection of sources which were credible, recent and proved my trend’s existence. The first two drafts of my paper did not include a more remote effect in my trend, which I was able to find and include in my final
My first paper, a narrative titled Confessions of A Living Sin, was arguably the easiest piece to create, while simultaneously being the most difficult to write. Narrative pieces push writers to write of moments that are strong in emotion, and often times leave the writer vulnerable to whom is reading their work. For me, my vulnerability was discussing the ostracism I faced as a queer and transgender person in a conservative catholic church. Because this piece focuses on an anger-fear fueled moment, I am able to use more expressive writing such as “The unbearable desire to peel off my skin, peel off the feelings that weren’t ‘normal’,” seen on the third page of Confessions of A Living Sin. While I was able to rewrite sections of the narrative or take out parts from the first to the final draft, that did not make it easier for me personally to express my feelings on paper for a professor to read. Following the narrative, was the critical review of Korean Barbeque Pizza, from a restaurant in South Minneapolis known as Pizzeria Lola. Writing my critical review proved to be fairly difficult for me, because it was not a paper focused solely on analysis nor emotion and experience. Since this piece was a combination of an analytical piece and a narrative piece, I struggled in finding the lines between expressive writing and more grammatically precise writing. Once I was able to ground myself with the criteria I had found, I was able to write more thorough ideas. On page 3, I examine the cultural differences between Italian-American cuisine and Korean cuisine, comparing the cuisine of Italian-American which …show more content…
Over the many hours we spent writing this paper together, we faced times of tension between each other, as well as our regards to the fire department. The differences between our first and last drafts of this paper are astounding, as we entirely changed our thesis half-way through the process in order to be more empathetic. Our original thesis read as “Encouraged by the department’s occupational hierarchy, the Apple Valley firefighters have come to use toxic masculinity as an outlet to mask personal insecurity” which we began to realize was presumptuous on our end as well as something of an attack on the vulnerability that had been exposed to us as observers of this group. Our final thesis, after many revisions and discussion, was “Emulating an image of strength the AVFD encourages and assertive environment, which ultimately cultivates its members’ stronger self-image”. Our growth through this paper was one which we cultivated through each other and the peer reviews we participated in.
My final paper for WRIT 1301 was a trend paper, in which I examined the rise of acceptance of queer people due to millennial lead efforts. Unlike the previous three papers, this paper was mostly analytical and factual, with little room for my preferred style of writing. My biggest struggle in this paper was the collection of sources which were credible, recent and proved my trend’s existence. The first two drafts of my paper did not include a more remote effect in my trend, which I was able to find and include in my final