Although I am far from perfect, my understanding of style has grown in leaps and bounds. My conclusion sentences were almost always weak and my introductions were mostly uninteresting. In my first connection essay for Jeffrey Harrison’s class I end with: “Leaving the readers to wonder how he is connected to the story, if he experienced what Panchito did, or if he has heard the voices of many people that have.” (5). In comparison my most recent connection essay closes with this short sentence: “What difference are we choosing to make?” (7). As one can see, the most recent closing sentence is engaging to the readers while the older closing sentence leaves the essay feeling unfinished and without any sense of closure. I learned that stories and poignant statements make great introductions as opposed to the standard short background on the subject with a (hypo)thesis at the end of the
Although I am far from perfect, my understanding of style has grown in leaps and bounds. My conclusion sentences were almost always weak and my introductions were mostly uninteresting. In my first connection essay for Jeffrey Harrison’s class I end with: “Leaving the readers to wonder how he is connected to the story, if he experienced what Panchito did, or if he has heard the voices of many people that have.” (5). In comparison my most recent connection essay closes with this short sentence: “What difference are we choosing to make?” (7). As one can see, the most recent closing sentence is engaging to the readers while the older closing sentence leaves the essay feeling unfinished and without any sense of closure. I learned that stories and poignant statements make great introductions as opposed to the standard short background on the subject with a (hypo)thesis at the end of the