In the subsequent paragraphs I will discuss the adjustments I implemented in the above four essays from the duration of this course. I decided to revise the following Written Assignments 2, 4, 5, and 8 using the feedback from my mentor and what I have learned throughout this course.
The first essay I corrected was Written Assignment 2. This was probably my favorite assignment. It was so easy to write about my hometown and exciting to tell someone about everything I love back home. I received some very helpful notes to improve the piece and I hope that I was able to convey them in the finished essay. A few of the correction that I implied were missed hyphens in words like drive-thru, sit-down, wave-free, and must-visit. I have to admit I still struggle with hyphenation and I hope that I am improving on this front. Another correction I made was adding a few words here and there, things like and as well as using are instead of is. The last major change was revising and combining two sentences to avoid a fragment. Secondly, I revised Written Assignment 4. I went into this piece thinking that it would be fairly easy but ended up making avoidable mistakes. I received a few more notes on this essay then I did the last. I began with some rewording to avoid repeated phrases that I did not notice the first time around. I corrected a misspelled word, class work to classwork. I reworded a sentence to reduce an exaggeration and cut an unnecessary sentence to avoid wordiness. I also had to adjust my terminology from timely to time consuming in order to imply the correct meaning. The third essay I corrected was Written Assignment 5. This assignment was an emotional piece for me. I have friends that have gone through and are still going through some of the examples I used in this paper. I again had very positive and helpful feedback from the …show more content…
This was one of the most challenging assignment for me. I spent a lot of time researching how to go about writing a book assessment and found an abundant amount of sources on the subject. I had all the resources I needed to get the job done and even decided on a book that was very familiar to me. I think my biggest problem was my passion for the book blinded me from seeing all the errors I was making within the essay. I scored my lowest grade on this assignment and hope that I have done better this time around. In my introduction paragraph I made two adjustments. The first being fixing a run-on sentence and the second was removing a hyphen from the word overcome. I cannot believe I am still struggling with these hyphens. In body paragraph one I made one minor change in vocabulary and switched bond with the work connection. In the second body paragraph I again had to remove an unneeded hyphen from the word flashback. The third body paragraph was a mess and I completely reworked the beginning and made several changes throughout. To start I cut out the part about adventure being a part of the plot, because adventure is not really a plot but more of a theme. I then reworded my first sentence so that it would make a bit more sense after having removed the part about the plot. I then proceeded to add a hyphen to the word coon-catching. The final modification I made to this paragraph changing countless to numerous and removing the
The first essay I corrected was Written Assignment 2. This was probably my favorite assignment. It was so easy to write about my hometown and exciting to tell someone about everything I love back home. I received some very helpful notes to improve the piece and I hope that I was able to convey them in the finished essay. A few of the correction that I implied were missed hyphens in words like drive-thru, sit-down, wave-free, and must-visit. I have to admit I still struggle with hyphenation and I hope that I am improving on this front. Another correction I made was adding a few words here and there, things like and as well as using are instead of is. The last major change was revising and combining two sentences to avoid a fragment. Secondly, I revised Written Assignment 4. I went into this piece thinking that it would be fairly easy but ended up making avoidable mistakes. I received a few more notes on this essay then I did the last. I began with some rewording to avoid repeated phrases that I did not notice the first time around. I corrected a misspelled word, class work to classwork. I reworded a sentence to reduce an exaggeration and cut an unnecessary sentence to avoid wordiness. I also had to adjust my terminology from timely to time consuming in order to imply the correct meaning. The third essay I corrected was Written Assignment 5. This assignment was an emotional piece for me. I have friends that have gone through and are still going through some of the examples I used in this paper. I again had very positive and helpful feedback from the …show more content…
This was one of the most challenging assignment for me. I spent a lot of time researching how to go about writing a book assessment and found an abundant amount of sources on the subject. I had all the resources I needed to get the job done and even decided on a book that was very familiar to me. I think my biggest problem was my passion for the book blinded me from seeing all the errors I was making within the essay. I scored my lowest grade on this assignment and hope that I have done better this time around. In my introduction paragraph I made two adjustments. The first being fixing a run-on sentence and the second was removing a hyphen from the word overcome. I cannot believe I am still struggling with these hyphens. In body paragraph one I made one minor change in vocabulary and switched bond with the work connection. In the second body paragraph I again had to remove an unneeded hyphen from the word flashback. The third body paragraph was a mess and I completely reworked the beginning and made several changes throughout. To start I cut out the part about adventure being a part of the plot, because adventure is not really a plot but more of a theme. I then reworded my first sentence so that it would make a bit more sense after having removed the part about the plot. I then proceeded to add a hyphen to the word coon-catching. The final modification I made to this paragraph changing countless to numerous and removing the