WHAT WORKS:
Act one starts the script off with a solid, narrative foundation with a clear goal and opponent for Frank and his friends to go up against. The power struggle for control of each new round of action figures consistently drives the story forward while simultaneously establishing pieces of how this all out feud started. Frank and his friends take their plan serious but in an almost satire manner that suited the group dynamic extremely well.
Likewise, the youthful determination and passion about building the ultimate action figure collection for themselves and all the kids out that are unable to create a compelling lore for the reader audiences. Frank categorizes he and his friends as being these unruly bunch, but they seem to stand on a code of …show more content…
Around page thirteen, Frank gives his speech in the tree house about how and why they should rally together to go up against Foreskither.
Besides a mention of his character around page 3, the reader/audience are not aware of his operation or his specific connection to Frank and his friends not being able to buy the action figures they want. In the first store sequence on page 10, when the boys don't have any luck in finding any action figures, they end up in a fight with a random guy in the feminine hygiene aisle and then inadvertently take their frustrations out on another character lurking near them.
Although the speech Frank's character gives on page 13 is constructed well, for him to suddenly start talking about the long-standing vendetta against him was confusing to follow. Secondly, by the end of act one, Frank and his friend start their takeover of the action figures shipments extremely well, which brings them all this great sense of self-established power going into act
Act one starts the script off with a solid, narrative foundation with a clear goal and opponent for Frank and his friends to go up against. The power struggle for control of each new round of action figures consistently drives the story forward while simultaneously establishing pieces of how this all out feud started. Frank and his friends take their plan serious but in an almost satire manner that suited the group dynamic extremely well.
Likewise, the youthful determination and passion about building the ultimate action figure collection for themselves and all the kids out that are unable to create a compelling lore for the reader audiences. Frank categorizes he and his friends as being these unruly bunch, but they seem to stand on a code of …show more content…
Around page thirteen, Frank gives his speech in the tree house about how and why they should rally together to go up against Foreskither.
Besides a mention of his character around page 3, the reader/audience are not aware of his operation or his specific connection to Frank and his friends not being able to buy the action figures they want. In the first store sequence on page 10, when the boys don't have any luck in finding any action figures, they end up in a fight with a random guy in the feminine hygiene aisle and then inadvertently take their frustrations out on another character lurking near them.
Although the speech Frank's character gives on page 13 is constructed well, for him to suddenly start talking about the long-standing vendetta against him was confusing to follow. Secondly, by the end of act one, Frank and his friend start their takeover of the action figures shipments extremely well, which brings them all this great sense of self-established power going into act