A determined scientist on a mission of peace to help a planet suffering from famine discovers that the villagers are killing a rare species, but is forced to flee when she’s accused of poisoning their water supply.
STORY COMMENTS
ON THE EVE OF EXTINCTION is a thought-provoking character driven, sci-fi environmental drama. The script explores the harmful consequences of man’s destruction of its natural habitat.
The story centers on a peaceful mission to help another planet suffering from famine, only to discover that a rare species will soon go extinct due to the planet’s misguided belief about the animal and the profit they gain by extracting the horns. The consequences are long-term, as the species actually is the answer to helping the …show more content…
This elevates the tension, jeopardy, and stakes. The escapes scenes are well crafted.
However, the script never really presents an antagonist. It might be more effective to create a character that is clearly in conflict with Tapestry and that the foe drives the rumor that she poisoned the water. However, it’s not really clear, right now, why they seem to want to accuse Tapestry and her team so easily of treason when they are helping the planet. The motivation isn’t clear. The connection between her warning them about extinction and the greedy of the people isn’t connected.
As mentioned, the climax escape with the jet pack is exciting and will resonate with the audience. The story ends as if it’s foreshadowing a possible series or franchise with the idea of the Galaxy Corp Renegades. The concern about this is that the story hasn’t really set up the feeling of a team being created. It’s not clear exactly who the core characters are for this team.
To make this work, the story would really need to focus on the individual skills and personalities of the “team” and Tapestry’s relationship to
STORY COMMENTS
ON THE EVE OF EXTINCTION is a thought-provoking character driven, sci-fi environmental drama. The script explores the harmful consequences of man’s destruction of its natural habitat.
The story centers on a peaceful mission to help another planet suffering from famine, only to discover that a rare species will soon go extinct due to the planet’s misguided belief about the animal and the profit they gain by extracting the horns. The consequences are long-term, as the species actually is the answer to helping the …show more content…
This elevates the tension, jeopardy, and stakes. The escapes scenes are well crafted.
However, the script never really presents an antagonist. It might be more effective to create a character that is clearly in conflict with Tapestry and that the foe drives the rumor that she poisoned the water. However, it’s not really clear, right now, why they seem to want to accuse Tapestry and her team so easily of treason when they are helping the planet. The motivation isn’t clear. The connection between her warning them about extinction and the greedy of the people isn’t connected.
As mentioned, the climax escape with the jet pack is exciting and will resonate with the audience. The story ends as if it’s foreshadowing a possible series or franchise with the idea of the Galaxy Corp Renegades. The concern about this is that the story hasn’t really set up the feeling of a team being created. It’s not clear exactly who the core characters are for this team.
To make this work, the story would really need to focus on the individual skills and personalities of the “team” and Tapestry’s relationship to