In this station Nitish noticed that his pieces of evidence were pretty strong but noticed that his commentary was very weak and lacking. Throughout his body paragraph he had evidence such as how and when Alexander Graham Bell created the telephone and how it has developed over the few centuries rapidly. Even though he had decent evidence, his commentary was very lacking and seemed very abrupt. The commentary took away from the entire essay and seemed very rushed. Through this station, Nitish was able to understand the importance of having evidence and backing it up with strong and a relevant
In this station Nitish noticed that his pieces of evidence were pretty strong but noticed that his commentary was very weak and lacking. Throughout his body paragraph he had evidence such as how and when Alexander Graham Bell created the telephone and how it has developed over the few centuries rapidly. Even though he had decent evidence, his commentary was very lacking and seemed very abrupt. The commentary took away from the entire essay and seemed very rushed. Through this station, Nitish was able to understand the importance of having evidence and backing it up with strong and a relevant