While you have excellent secondary sources and evidence for women in traditional Italian society, the main problem with the argumentation is the lack of sources and/or evidence for women in American laws and society, as well as a lack of examples/evidence in support of the analysis of women in our contemporary societies. Overall organization of paper is very good, however at times the line of thought is a bit scattered; you need to use more easy transitions and divide more accurately the content into paragraphs. For your next written assignment, make sure you review the MLA style for in-text citations (there are some errors), and I recommend that you work more on your writing: punctuation is the main problem here. Argumentation: 21,25/25 – Research: 22,75/25 – Organization: 22/25 - Writing: 20,25/25 …show more content…
Argumentation lacks a theory of reference on dehumanization, such as the theories developed by Martha Nussbaum or by Leyens and Haslam. The idea of a blurring morality in the lager is well examined with very good quotes from the book, as well as the process of physical dehumanization. However, the important question of how Levi was able to preserve his own humanity remains unanswered. The paper format (font, margins, etc.) and the final bibliography do not meet the requirements. The theme of survival at the end of paper does not interfere with the other topic, but I agree that dehumanization needs to be explored furtherly because you picked a very interesting subject. Argumentation: 18,75/25 – Research: 16,25/25 – Organization: 22,75/25 - Writing: 20,25/25