Caring for Music Piracy Music is something that is shared and listened to all around the world. Today, there are a variety of different types music. One of the bad sides of music is music piracy. This crime is taken seriously by some, but others don’t have a care in the world about it. Everything we do has a consequence attached to us, some are more harsh than others. Music has changed the world and can bring people together. Kids nowadays don’t have the money to afford to buy music on the internet or at a store. There are a variety of websites that permit you to download music illegally. Charles W. Moore explains music piracy in his essay called “Is Music Piracy Stealing?”. If you read Moore’s essay all the way through he has, in detail, explained music piracy and genetically modified foods. It is obvious that he has done his research. Moore has evidence to support his claims, but all his points do not help him achieve his main point getting across to his readers. When Moore starts his essay, he writes bitterly which isn't a wise choice to make for a hook. His first sentence he says “This week the Motion Picture Association of America (MPAA) launched an ad campaign using slogan “copying is stealing,” attempting to convey the message that digital copying is as serious and criminal as stealing CD from a record shop or a DVD from a video shop” (Moore 242). Moore’s motive in his introduction is unclear on the subject of music piracy, and was cut too short . Moore could have started his essay with a better hook. A great suggestion is that Moore needs to replace his introduction with his conclusion. He says in the conclusion “Copyright as we knew it in the twentieth century is doomed” (Moore 249). This is a hook, which he puts in his conclusion. Which is a mistake because this hooks the reader and no reader wants to be hooked to your essay at the end. This is a mistake that must be avoided. Something that is noticed in Moore’s essay is that it is all over the place. In the middle of Moore’s essay he says, “The law usually has more to do with protecting vested interests that enjoy political influence, often bought and paid for, then it does with mortality... Copyright laws are merely an arbitrary and mutable legislative construct, and do not necessarily carry any objective moral weigh ” (Moore 246). He talks all about music piracy in the beginning till he gets to the middle which can confuse readers. He talks about how corrupt the system is using this device doesn't help the read get his point but does the opposite and confuses the reader instead. Moore does not stay committed to his side of the argument in his essay. He doesn't pick a side and makes false claims. He must know what the devices are in order to argue against them. The purpose is they do a plethora of jobs and don’t get recognized for it. A suggestion would be for him to summarize the purpose in this way for this essay. There is a bunch of evidence in Moore’s essay suggests that he uses his evidence that don’t support him his point. For example he says, “In genetic engineering, only tiny fraction of the makeup of the organism can be said to be product of the scientist” (Moore 246). Yes this is evidence, but how does it help with morals and ethics of stealing music? The simple answer
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Moore has found an analogy that he thinks is “good”, but, in all actuality, is very poor. He says, “A good analogy is that of genetically modified (GM) foodstuffs, which enjoy intellectual property protection analogous to that pertaining to music, pictures, or prose” (Moore 246). Going to music piracy to genetically modified food is a difficult transition that must not be made. This mistake must not be repeated, Moore needs to come up with a better analogy to improve his writing skills. What Moore could have used for his analogy is a student, at high school for instincts, taking a picture of their finished homework and sends it to all their classmates. To get his point across, Moore could has used this analogy instead of genetically modified
Moore has found an analogy that he thinks is “good”, but, in all actuality, is very poor. He says, “A good analogy is that of genetically modified (GM) foodstuffs, which enjoy intellectual property protection analogous to that pertaining to music, pictures, or prose” (Moore 246). Going to music piracy to genetically modified food is a difficult transition that must not be made. This mistake must not be repeated, Moore needs to come up with a better analogy to improve his writing skills. What Moore could have used for his analogy is a student, at high school for instincts, taking a picture of their finished homework and sends it to all their classmates. To get his point across, Moore could has used this analogy instead of genetically modified