English 1101

As I have progressed through school writing has been my Achilles heel. I was never fond of writing and I always dreaded the idea of writing essays. I was never a strong writer. I always considered myself a subpar writer. I believed that I was capable of meeting expectations rather than exceeding. College and high school English are drastically different. High school English was less demanding, while College English requires lots of focus and attention to detail. English 1101 was filled with growing pains and learning experiences. At first, I was overwhelmed by the criticism noted on my essays, however the criticism motivated me to improve writing to eliminate the negative feedback. Throughout the year I faced situations where I struggled with …show more content…
In my opinion, a good introduction and thesis is what allows an essay to flow. The introduction of an essay sets the tone of the paper. If the introduction of a paragraph is poor, then the rest of the paper will be poor. I was able to determine what I wanted to discuss however I was unable to convey an introduction and thesis that correctly set the tone for my essays. The words in my introductions seemed to be filled with wordiness, awkwardness, and poor word choice. The introduction of my first paper lacked meaning and details. For example a sentence in the introduction of my first paper read, “Before I was set to star as a beau in the Christian Rights of Passage Cotillion, my siblings and I took pictures to capture the moment,” however after revision the sentence changed to, “October 25, 2014, I remember the night very vividly. This was the night of the Christian Rites of Passage Cotillion.” The revision process exhibit in my portfolio provides the revision of the entire introduction as well as the progression I have made towards writing the best introduction I can. I consider the two revised essay exhibits within my portfolio my best