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However, changes were necessary nonetheless. In Marvin Bell’s technique of Re-reading, He states, “Syntax is logic or the appearance of it, and a new logic inevitably produces a new tone of voice (Bell Page 84)”. When making changes to the second poem, I paid close attention to the syntax. Sometimes I found individual stanzas would fare better if repositioned in the poem. For example, in "Arctic Fox," I rearranged, stanzas 1,2 with 3,4 respectively. Due to the change of stanzas, the syntax in the beginning and middle ultimately changed, therefore, creating a new language and strengthening the beginning and intermediate of the poem. In addition to the modification of these stanzas, I found the syntax “Arctic fox’s” end “killing me” to be rather weak. As a result, I decided to make the poem’s ending stronger and a bit more mysterious, replacing the line "killing me" with “begging me to stay, pleading for a home.” This ending adds a mysterious element to the poem and makes the reader question the state of the fox, rather than saying the Fox is dying. In Marvin Bell’s Technique of Re-reading, he says, “Sometimes, at the end of a poem, the world is larger, and the speaker is less alone.” (Bell Page 88) While the speaker is certainly still alone, this new ending creates a larger world full of mystery for the