In this piece of writing I believe I did well on the ideas, mainly for the book A Long Way Gone. I found that it was fairly easy to relate my thesis statement to A Long Way Gone. I was able to find a plethora of points in the book that related to my original topic. The book was a great choice for this topic due to its content; overcoming severe challenges/obstacles.
2. At least two or three areas that I need to work on.
The first area I need to work on is my use of punctuation, specifically when dealing with run off sentences, as I mentioned in the 3rd point, my use of conjunctions between clauses was one major aspect of my essay that I changed. The second area of concern that I need to work on is formulating